Query Critique Winner

The Random Number Generator has spoken and the winner is #1..Laura Hughes! Congrats--I guess 5th time is the charm! I'll email instructions regarding your query critique. Thanks to everyone who entered, and check back soon for another chance to win! Also, please keep noting how many times you've entered because I've been doing extra critiques for persistent folks who have entered 5 or more times in a row. Good luck! :)