Wednesday Query Critique

I missed you all yesterday but spent a long, wonderful weekend in the mountains. I'm finally getting caught up on things, just in time for the Wednesday Query Critique. To enter the weekly query critique giveaway, simply follow the directions below. Good luck!

REMINDERS: Please read my prior post on Query Tips before entering. Also, as mentioned in my giveaway, I tend to be very direct and picky, but my goal is to get your query in the best shape possible. Finally, the query is only the first step--make sure the entire book is as good as the query before you hit "Send."

RULES:

Just leave a comment telling me you'd like to be entered in the giveaway and give your email address, using (at) and (com) as follows so the spam bots don't find you. 

I will use a random number generator to pick the winner who will receive a query critique through email. NOTE: If your query involves space monkeys, I might make an exception and do an extra critique!